I am a Year 8 student at Panmure Bridge School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Learning Space 2 and my teacher is Mrs Anderson.
Monday, 10 July 2017
Winter Learning Journey-Story-18
It was a beautiful day with birds talking-tweeting and bees gazing all around. There was loads of creatures spending there time around a beautiful garden,but fortuneteller all of the sounds didn't make sounds anymore. All I could hear was rats squeaking. As I though behind the beautiful garden was a bucket full of rats eating the wonderful flowers that kids has planted.There was only one thing to grow the flowers back by using the water I had in my bag. It was as small as a Lego piece. As I got out of bed I though that it was all are dream. But it wasn't. I say to myself nothing has gone wrong. After I thought that it wasn't a dream I ran as fast as I could to somewhere that I would see everything like the view. I saw a big container and started to climb it. All I could see was a Jet plane. I remembered I had a speaker in my bag. I grabbed it out and shouted loud to the pilot making loads of sounds. They came over and grabbed me saying how I got stuck there. I say to them ''I had no idea how''. It was just a dream.
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Hi Mele
ReplyDeleteNice story! I like how you included the sounds that the birds were making too.
Great job on this!
Hi Mele,
ReplyDeleteI really like your story. It has emotion in it. Keep up the great work!
Eric
Hi Mele. I like how you have used a simile. Remember to always double check your work before you post it. Keep up the amazing work.
ReplyDeleteHello Mele
ReplyDeleteI like your story. I think the best part is ' It was as small as a Lego piece'. Great use of a simile! Well done.
Daniel
Hello Mele, I really like your short story. I like how you have used dialogue to show that someone in your story is talking. Keep up the good work.
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