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Monday, 10 July 2017

Winter Learning Journey-Story-18

It was a beautiful day with birds talking-tweeting and bees gazing all around. There was loads of creatures spending there time around a beautiful garden,but fortuneteller all of the sounds didn't make sounds anymore. All I could hear was rats squeaking. As I though behind the beautiful garden was a bucket full of rats eating the wonderful flowers that kids has planted.There was only one thing to grow the flowers back by using the water I had in my bag. It was as small as a Lego piece. As I got out of bed I though that it was all are dream. But it wasn't. I say to myself nothing has gone wrong. After I thought that it wasn't a dream I ran as fast as I could to somewhere that I would see everything like the view. I saw a big container and started to climb it. All I could see was a Jet plane. I remembered I had a speaker in my bag. I grabbed it out and shouted loud to the pilot making loads of sounds. They came over and grabbed me saying how I got stuck there. I say to them ''I had no idea how''. It was just a dream.
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5 comments:

  1. Alex10 July 2017 at 19:57

    Hi Mele
    Nice story! I like how you included the sounds that the birds were making too.
    Great job on this!

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  2. Eric17 July 2017 at 11:53

    Hi Mele,
    I really like your story. It has emotion in it. Keep up the great work!
    Eric

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  3. Ohhsen18 July 2017 at 20:58

    Hi Mele. I like how you have used a simile. Remember to always double check your work before you post it. Keep up the amazing work.

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  4. daniel20 July 2017 at 11:43

    Hello Mele
    I like your story. I think the best part is ' It was as small as a Lego piece'. Great use of a simile! Well done.
    Daniel

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  5. aminiasi22 July 2017 at 23:05

    Hello Mele, I really like your short story. I like how you have used dialogue to show that someone in your story is talking. Keep up the good work.

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